Is it normal poem written by 7 year old boy

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When I was very young our school made all the kids write a story that would later be published in a book. Most of the stories were either about stuff like animals or tv shows, or they didn't even make sense. I was randomly reading it when I bumped into a story a friend wrote (when he was 7 years old) and it's so different from all the other stories! It's called "My first feeling".
From the top of my tower,
I see something breathtaking
roses, landscapes, and I see you,
Always playing with the roses.
Everything is beautiful,
there's something I feel,
I can't vent with anything or anyone,
only with you.
You are my space to breathe and cry,
I can't tell,
I'm a coward and I only dare to write,
Cry and sing.
Is this a normal poem for a 7 year old? (we didn't even have to write poems, just stories)

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42% Normal

Based on 57 votes (24 yes)

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KeddersPrincess

11 years ago

Well, it's definatly mature for his age. Sounds like this kid's got a gift!

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GuessWho

11 years ago

I wouldn't say it's normal. His talent for this is above average.

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iin2want2know

11 years ago

That's very impressive poetry for someone so young. I wonder if he still writes and if so, what his style is now.

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blackhummingbird

11 years ago

wow.. that poem was fantastic. I can't even write poems so lovely and profund at my age... I IZ JELLLY.

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myboyfriendsbitch

11 years ago

A beautiful poem like this would not even be normal for a 17 year old in a creative writing class. Just lovely. I hope he's kept it up.

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NotStrangeBird

11 years ago

It's times like this that i wish i was from Nantucket.

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- Avant-Garde
  
  11 years ago
  
  For some reason, the name "Nantucket" reminds me of a bucket full of freshly caught fish with melted butter on them.
  
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[Old Memory]

11 years ago

"Yankee doodle went to town
Riding on a rocket
Stuck his finger up his butt
And called it hersheys chocolate!

Yankee doodle keep it up
Yankee doodle dandy
Keep sticking your finger up your butt
And selling it like candy!"

I'm pretty sure that when it comes to poems, my 7 year old self has you beat buddy.

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- Justsomejerk
  
  11 years ago
  
  User reported as underage.
  
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  - [Old Memory]
    
    11 years ago | pl
    
    Woah now... There is no need for that.
    
    Here, take my lunch money.
    
    ^{*_*}>$
    
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[Old Memory]

11 years ago

Gloomy little frown
I'll turn it right around
Look at what I've done
But didn't it seem fun?
You think I'm not so clear
Of who is lurking here
But it won't matter much
One day my hands will clutch
Your throats, and they will squeeze
Out among the trees
Where I will watch them cry
You thought it was a lie
But now you hear some truth
This tale contains much proof
Of something that's to come
Get scared, you better run
Over this I don't feel bad
Over this I will be glad
You should not have crossed MY line
Don't worry, you still have time
For I shall not venture 'till I'm older
Out to claim these few, I've told her
40 years is all they'll tread
From this time on they'll all be dead
Worked it out
Yes Indeed
To cheat the world
Of my stolen seeds
Friendship does come into play
Sometimes "friends" must meet their day
And if I'm caught I'll wear a smile
Sit in a cell and think awhile
About the looks on the faces
Of those few who left my graces

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- Justsomejerk
  
  11 years ago
  
  I never read people's poetry yet I made an exception for you cat. I shouldn't have.
  
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  - iEatZombies_
    
    11 years ago
    
    Abraham Lincoln was a good ol' man
    Jumped out the window with his dick in his hand
    Said "Excuse me ladies, just doing my duty-
    Pull down your pants and give me some booty!"
    
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    - Justsomejerk
      
      11 years ago
      
      I'm sorry, I will not make the same mistake twice.
      
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    - TheGuruOfTheSauce
      
      11 years ago
      
      2live crew
      
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    - Avant-Garde
      
      11 years ago
      
      *Chuckles*
      
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  - [Old Memory]
    
    11 years ago
    
    People do not wish to appear foolish; to avoid the appearance of foolishness, they are willing to remain actually fools.
    
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    - Justsomejerk
      
      11 years ago
      
      Much better, even if it dosent rhyme.
      
      Possibly the most profound statement I've read in my time on IIN.
      
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      - [Old Memory]
        
        11 years ago
        
        Accurate too!
        
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- iin2want2know
  
  11 years ago
  
  Bravo...excellent....my hat off to you *clapping*
  
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Avant-Garde

9 years ago

He has talent. Tell him not to waste it! His poem reminds me of Mattie Stepenak's work.

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TheGuruOfTheSauce

11 years ago

Down by the river by the boats
Where everybody goes to be alone
Where you wont see any rising sun
Down to the river we will run

When by the water we drink to the dregs
Look at the stones on the river bed
I can tell from your eyes
You've never been by the riverside

Down by the water the riverbed
Somebody calls you somebody says
swim with the current and float away
Down by the river everyday

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blackhummingbird

11 years ago

profound*

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Avant-Garde

11 years ago

That's very deep for a seven year old. You had talent, talent which shouldn't be put to waste!

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BlueJeansWhiteShirt

11 years ago

I'm sorry but is this really true. My brother is 8 and can barely put a good adjective into a simple sentence.
If it is true, then he was about 8 years ahead of his age. Even Steven Hawkings wasn't that far ahead when he was young.
I have a lot of experience with children. I have never in my life experienced a 7 year old writing a poem, never mind one including adjectives or verbs.

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- Anonymous Post Author
  
  11 years ago
  
  yes, it's 100% real.
  
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  - noid
    
    9 years ago
    
    Couldn't he have copied it from somewhere?
    
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MissyLeyneous

11 years ago

Deck the house with Gas-o-liiiine~
Fa-la-la-la-la~ La-la-la-la~
Light a match and hear them screeeaaam~
Fa-la-la-la-la~ La-la-la-la~
Now the house(/school) is burnt to ashhhhessss~
Fa-la-la-la-la~ La-la-la-la~
Thank the Lord for Natural Gases!
Fa-la-la-la-la~ La-la-la-la~

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- iin2want2know
  
  11 years ago
  
  Ah, just in time for the holidays.
  
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- [Old Memory]
  
  11 years ago
  
  and your so good shit
  
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