Is it normal that i can write extremely deep poetry to a girl i barely know?

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So i went to this two day class activity and while on the boss a girl that i get along with like any other girl in my class, you know casual talk and shite, asks me to tell her a poem on the bus. i am a writer and enjoy writing poetry very much, everyone in my school likes it so she asked me for one and i told that on the campfire i would. So the night before the campfire i am lying down thinking what poem can i tell her so decide to write one for her. i wrote it and all but it was very deep and she was like an in love girl who had just received a letter from a faraway lover. i have literally no feelings for her but i still dont know where all these stuff i worte down came from.

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  • Angel_in_a_Glass_Dress
    12 years ago

    I'll be honest... back when I was a child I use to think my poetry was deep. As I aged however I looked back and saw some of it as pretend-deep, almost childish.

    You may find that what you call "extremely" deep now may change as you mature. Although sometimes you will also find that you may create something that lasts. Along with my poetry, I did sometimes write beginnings to short stories that I found myself enjoying years later.

    However, before you continue on your path to being a writer you will need to consider a few things.

    1) Spellcheck. It is your friend not your enemy.

    2) Proofread. This is also your friend. You may also want to consider having someone else read it as well to provide constructive criticism for you. These days it's nicknamed as a "beta reader".

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  • Lysander
    12 years ago

    A gift of snow
    as an angel's wing.
    You don't know how it moves me,
    your smile, that pulls me to happiness

    A piece of night
    starred, smooth, pure ...
    You do not know how I drowned in it,
    in your hair, I found what I can only dream.

    Two shining gems,
    windows of the infinite.
    I get lost looking for,
    in your eyes, for your dreamy soul of an angel.

    The lands of Castile
    envy your beauty.
    The nobles of Seville
    long for your greatness.

    The women of Granada
    and princesses of Florence
    they do not compare, my friend,
    you are my only belief.

    One last word I declaim
    no ink or no paper, my friend.
    Words that would say he who sees,
    I love you, I love you, I love you.

    sorry it is not as good in english but still enjoy!

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    • pala
      12 years ago

      That's surprisingly good. :)

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  • pala
    12 years ago

    How did the boss react to you getting on them?

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    • Lysander
      12 years ago

      ok ok i get it, i meant bus, not boss sorry

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    • Angel_in_a_Glass_Dress
      12 years ago

      That's unusual - usually it's the boss that rides your back, not the other way around.

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  • ThatKidTotallyRocks
    12 years ago

    Oh, that is very good.

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    • Lysander
      12 years ago

      thanks a lot! and you too @pala :)

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  • mikki_rox
    12 years ago

    I wish I could write deep poetry! Kind of jealous haha :)

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  • kellstar79
    12 years ago

    Translate it to English using google translate and then copy and paste it here :)

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  • Lysander
    12 years ago

    i would love to post it here, but there is one little detail: it is in spanish

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  • kellstar79
    12 years ago

    Tell us the poem!! I'm really interested!! It comes from your heart and your creative sided brain.

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