Could you guys critique my first video? too nervous to show my friends

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Hey guys! I don't want to blogspam, but I made my first youtube video and I'm too nervous to show it to people I know. Please let me know what parts need improvement. Thanks!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sBnNa1W9oQY&feature=youtu.be

Work on audio 2
Work on art 1
Work on script 1
It's all good 4
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  • wigsplitz
    11 years ago

    Very, very bad. There was maybe 2 or 3 small gems in there but unfortunately they got buried by the 1,000 layers of shit you threw on top of them.

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  • Shackleford96
    11 years ago

    Personally, I didn't like it. I think your friends would probably appreciate it though. You should show them :)

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  • anti-hero
    11 years ago

    The tits and beer made me laugh.

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  • Ghost-of-the-Marlboro-Man
    11 years ago

    Needs more cigarettes.

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  • Raizo
    11 years ago

    I wanted to watch it as well. I think you are afraid of receiving the critique that you want. No reason to be nervous, just allow us to give you advice and use it to improve your vids!

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    • Anonymous Post Author
      11 years ago

      Sorry, I edited the video and forgot that would make the link invalid. Here's the newest one from my channel.

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U3fbg2ln3nY

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  • SangoNyappy
    11 years ago

    I wanted to see why did you delete it? :(

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    • Anonymous Post Author
      11 years ago

      Ah sorry, I didn't delete it, I edited it and reposted it. I forgot that would make this link invalid.

      Here's the newest one from my channel.

      http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U3fbg2ln3nY

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      • SangoNyappy
        11 years ago

        Oh ok. This one was actually pretty good I subscribed you ^^

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        • Corleone
          11 years ago

          Really? Thanks! That means a lot to me :D

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          • SangoNyappy
            11 years ago

            Yeah you're welcome I always liked those videos where people draw and talk about something and those drawing were cute ^^

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  • Fabulous
    11 years ago

    It needs more girls sucking me. The only videos I like are porn

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  • dom180
    11 years ago

    I didn't actually laugh out loud, but I thought it was quite funny. I enjoyed the drawings too :P I'd feel nervous about sharing it too, but I don't think you have any reason to be.

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    • Anonymous Post Author
      11 years ago

      Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. :)

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  • bananaface
    11 years ago

    :) Cute! It made me smile. Also, slightly irrelevant, but your accent is kind of great!:P

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    • Anonymous Post Author
      11 years ago

      Thanks! I'm afraid the general opinion on my video is 'shitty', though. :s

      Well, on IIN anyway

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