The poo from hell

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  • DumBellle
    8 years ago | pl

    Too long and trying too hard.

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    • VirgilManly
      8 years ago | pl

      I have to agree...although it did have potential and showed signs sincere effort.

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      • Enizzle
        8 years ago | pl

        You forgot the word "of" after signs and sincere.

        Hence, your literary critique is invalid.

        Excellent attempt though.

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        • VirgilManly
          8 years ago | pl

          Your critique of my critique is invalid as a comma could have been used. Bad punctuation doesn't invalidate the same as say an endlessly drawn out plot line that peaks too soon and just drones on.

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          • Enizzle
            8 years ago | pl

            Endlessly drawn out?

            It takes 5 minutes to read this. Are you perhaps suffering from ADD? If so, I'd suggest you stop reading longer stories and stick to picture books, my son.

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            • VirgilManly
              8 years ago | pl

              Rarely does anyone on this site want to spend that much time reading a post. That's why posts are usually the length of your first paragraph.
              Simmer down now and don't upset yourself.

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    • Enizzle
      8 years ago | pl

      Thank god we have such esteemed and accomplished critics like you here. Otherwise, how would any of us improve?

      Oh, and also, go fuck yourself you cunt.

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