Grammar and line breaks, bud. You've definitely got the bare bones of a story there, but where a story shines is in its details. What's the overarching idea of this story? How do the character's stories relate to said idea? Is Lisa's family related to the drug war? I think that Dre and Kana could be fleshed out a bit more. Also, would this story focus more on the journey to Miami, or would it be more about the kids helping out Alex's father?
There's certainly nothing necessarily wrong with your idea, but you've got to fill out the specifics before anything else happens. If you were a sculptor, I would say that your post is a hunk of granite. There exists potential in your post, but you've got to bring it out.
this story will focus more on the journey to Miami and when they get to Miami it will be focusing on the teenagers helping out Alex's dad.
and Kana and Dre are both childhood friends of Alex but dre doesn't really travel alot because he usually focuses on his studies and Kana is a adventurous girl who knows alot about Florida but after a truck accident her parents are very cautious of her. hope I've answered your questions!
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Grammar and line breaks, bud. You've definitely got the bare bones of a story there, but where a story shines is in its details. What's the overarching idea of this story? How do the character's stories relate to said idea? Is Lisa's family related to the drug war? I think that Dre and Kana could be fleshed out a bit more. Also, would this story focus more on the journey to Miami, or would it be more about the kids helping out Alex's father?
There's certainly nothing necessarily wrong with your idea, but you've got to fill out the specifics before anything else happens. If you were a sculptor, I would say that your post is a hunk of granite. There exists potential in your post, but you've got to bring it out.
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yeah i understand what you mean.by the way this would be my first fan fiction.
i will answer your questions right now
no Lisa's family is not related to the drug war
this story will focus more on the journey to Miami and when they get to Miami it will be focusing on the teenagers helping out Alex's dad.
and Kana and Dre are both childhood friends of Alex but dre doesn't really travel alot because he usually focuses on his studies and Kana is a adventurous girl who knows alot about Florida but after a truck accident her parents are very cautious of her. hope I've answered your questions!