In honor of the death of a loved and troubled mom

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I wrote this seven years ago following my mother's death from emphysema. The verses are all jumbled due to limited space, and I do NOT claim this is a great work of art, having no formal training in writing poetry. It simply represents my thoughts on the loss of relationship both wonderful and terrible.

Last Whispers

Flowers - she smelled of withered flowers and fresh disinfectants
yellow, slackened skin against crisp, white sheets
wide-eyed as a crucified martyr

Whispers - she whispered in short bursts, breath stolen by cigarettes
suicide on the installment plan
last payment now due in full

Morning - I said I’d return in the morning with your makeup
your eyes distant, fixed on old ceiling tiles
you are leaving me and we both know it

Whispers - the doctor lowers his voice to report the latest news
but we both know there’s nothing left to do
except for me to love what’s left of you

Death - is the journey we all must take
alone
in the common abyss of all mortals
whispers the hopes of forevermore

Faith - is believing in something even when
unseen
I believe love survives death’s partition
we will meet in heaven, whisper our love again

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Comments ( 9 )
  • purplemyfavoritecolor_xD
    14 years ago

    That's beautiful. Very artistic. And f**k all those a**holes who are calling it sh*t. They don't know a damn thing.

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  • Nihonjin
    16 years ago

    I lost my mother, too, and I think that poem was great. I can tell that you experienced a very painful loss. This isn't a good place to post such serious material, however.

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  • Tobyrh
    7 years ago

    Very touching, I lost my mother too about 4 years ago. Sorry for your loss. This seems like a good and beautiful way of handling it.

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  • nathan-hosie
    11 years ago

    jks

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  • lovebabe86
    14 years ago

    Very touching piece. I hope you are doing well.

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  • churbur
    15 years ago

    People need to stop posting shit like this on here. Are you asking if your poem is normal? No. If you wanna share your poetry go somewhere else this isn't the place.

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  • bluezebra
    15 years ago

    That was beautiful, if i were the type of person to, i'd probably have cried...i think i lack emotion..or the proper showing of it..anyway, beautiful!

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  • Potato
    16 years ago

    that was very moving and well written. You have a talent. I hope it takes you places.

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  • EccentricWeird
    16 years ago

    WHIPPED!

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