Advice on a poem/song?

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  • Yeah, the rhyming is totally simplistic, it's like you've constructed the poem with the sole aim of making it rhyme. There's nothing original or interesting about it, it's kind of whiny, I dunno if you are 13/14 it's a good effort.

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