There is nothing wrong with simple rhyming. The most famous poets have been known to use a,a,b,b. But, of course, they make up for it in other ways: imagery, assonance, general feeling and message..
My advice is to find a better rhythm. Try to get exactly the same or at least close amount of syllables in each line, or section.
For example: Line 1: 5, Line 2: 7, Line 3:5, Line 4: 7.
Advice on a poem/song?
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There is nothing wrong with simple rhyming. The most famous poets have been known to use a,a,b,b. But, of course, they make up for it in other ways: imagery, assonance, general feeling and message..
My advice is to find a better rhythm. Try to get exactly the same or at least close amount of syllables in each line, or section.
For example: Line 1: 5, Line 2: 7, Line 3:5, Line 4: 7.